#Ockham NZ Awards MY CHOICE winner Fiona Kidman

- Author: Dame Fiona Judith Kidman DNZM OBE (1940)
- Title: This Mortal Boy
- Published: 2018
- Genre: historical fiction
- List of Challenges 2019
- Monthly reading plan
- #AWW2019
- @AusWomenWriters
- Trivia: 2019 Winner of The New Zealand Booklovers’ Prize for Fiction
- Trivia: 2018 Shortlisted for the NZ Heritage Book Awards
- Trivia: 2019 Shortlisted for the Ockham New Zealand Book Awards
- #TheOckhams will be awarded 14 May 2019.
- @PenguinBooks_NZ
Quickscan:
- On 05 December1955
- …New Zealand’s second-last execution occurred.
- The victim was a young Irishman,
- Albert (Paddy) Black…a bog-trotter.
- He knifed a man, Johnny McBride…bit of a rough diamond,
- in a bar-room brawl 26 July 1955
- …called the “juke-box murder”.
- Public revulsion at his execution was a major force
- ..in abolishing the death penalty in 1961.
- Black was convicted of murder and executed.
- Yet there were clear signs that his trial
- …was a severe miscarriage of justice.
- Main characters:
- Albert (Paddy) Black Irish, aka Shaun Donavan (killer)
- Alan Keith Jacques English, aka Johnny McBride (victim)
- Setting change: 1955 Belfast Ireland
- Flashback: Belfast, parents, childhood, WW II, sailing to life in NZ
- Setting: NZ Aukland, Wellington, Auckland Parliament House
- Mt Eden Prison NZ (arrested awaits trial),
- Ye Olde Barn cafe (crime scene)
- Setting: Station Hotel Aukland NZ (where jury is staying during trial)
- Setting: Aukland Court house – jury’s decision (ch 19)
- Setting: Mount Eden Prison…execution
Conclusion:
- This story is based on facts that are in no way
- sentimentalized by the author.
- This Mortal Boy reads like a Greek Tragedy
- …we know what is going to happen in the last act.
- The platform on the gallows will actually be a trapdoor.
- The book is a stark report about a young boy who
- made a mistake and paid the ultimate price, his life.
- Strong point:
- Research
- Dame Fiona Kidman has studied the trial transcripts
- …read copies of Albert Black’s letters to friend his Peter
- ..and visited Ireland to research the public records in Belfast
- (births, marriages, deaths).
- Chapter 27 is and eyewitness report of the execution by J. Young.
- (…a very confronting read)
- Trial witnesses, lawyers and members of the jury are fictional.
- Strong point:
- Kidman examines history with a fine tooth comb.
- She supports her story with references
- to Australian politicians, The Mazengarb 1954 (report on moral delinquency)
- …and the hanging of Fred Foster July 1955 for the ‘Milk Bar Murder’.
- Strong point:
- The jury
- In chapter two Kidman takes time to
- …introduce the reader to the 12 men on the jury.
- At first I thought Kidman was being too detailed.
- But later I realized why it is important to know the
- social class (job, education) of these men.
- Only then can we understand the decision making
- process about Albert Black:
- guilty or not guilty.
- Three jurors add doubt to the arguments for guilty.
- I was captivated and drawn in as these jurors try to
- remain staunchly against a guilty verdict.
- You will read what happened
- ….that pushed the verdict to guilty!
- Weak point of audio book:
- The singing!
- I’d rather read that someone is humming or singing a song
- …than to actually hearing it. #Distracting.
- Strong point:
- Ch 14 – Oliver Buchanan, lawyer
- We imagine that the case is open and shut but…
- Buchanan works tirelessly to help his client
- …avoid the death penalty.
- There is something missing in this case
- …but he cannot find the piece.
- Buchanan is interested in
- what happened before Paddy stabbed Johnny
- …that can prove that this crime was based on an accident.
- Buchanan quotes Thomas Hardy:
- “…for every bad..there is a worse.”
Last thoughts:
- Capital punishment…is such a contentious issue.
- While reading this book I was forced to think
- about the consequences of this policy.
- #Heartwrenching
- MY CHOICE to win Ockham 2019 for Fiction.
Quote:
- Juror – Arthur university lecturer discusses… life? or death ?
- “…are you all so far beyond reproach
- that you have a right to make this decision?
- I’m not sure that I am.”

#NSW Premier’s Award Winner 2019 The Lebs

- Author: Michael Mohammed Ahmad
- Title: The Lebs
- Published: 2018
- Publisher: Hachette Australia
- Trivia: 2019 NSW Premier’s Literary Award WINNER Multicultural Writing
- List of Challenges 2019
- Monthly plan
- #NSWPLA
- @HachetteAus
Introduction:
- M.M. Ahmad, second generation Arab-Australian Muslim
- whose family was illiterate.
- He has worked very hard to become a creative writer:
- four years completing an arts degree
- two years completing my honors degree
- another four years completing my PhD.
- M.M. Ahmad deserves 5 stars!
- Next generation of new Australian writers….
Conclusion:
- Gritty, raw look at
- the world that M. M. Ahmad knows so well.
- His grandparents came to Australia from Lebanon in 1970
- …with no money and no education.
- Ahmad has worked hard to master creative writing
- …and his 2nd novel is the result.
- It is a compelling achievement.
- The language is filled with expletives
- …but I’ve learned to read around that aspect of the book!
- Main character is Bani…a teenager dealing with
- many of the usual issues teenage boys face —
- gender, sexuality, race, and class….
- whilst also trying to obtain an education.
- Bani is a Leb second generation Arab-Australian Muslim
- growing up in Western Sydney between the
- years 1998 and 2005
- …what he is describing feels like a war zone!
Last thoughts:
- I saw M. M. Ahmad accept the NSW Lit Award 2019
- for Multicultural Writing via an internet link
- with the ceremonies on April 29th.
- I was not going to read this book but felt I should
- investigate another side of Australia other than bush stories.
- M. M. Ahmad has impressed met with his novel.
- Gripping look at the Arab-Australian Muslim male identity.
- It is told from the perspective of Bani Adam
- a fictional version of the author.
- This book is buoyant, intelligent
- …and very satisfying as it
- …delivers a solid dose of uncomfortable truth.
- #MustRead
#Poetry Pulitzer Prize 2017 Olio

- Author: Tyehimba Jess
- Title: Olio
- Published: 2016
- Genre: poetry …and then some!
- Cover: pictogram.
- ..if you hold the book at a distance OLIO
- …you will see a face!
- OLIO: same if you read it left–>right or left<– right!
- Title: OLIO = middle part of a minstrel show.
- List of Challenges 2019
- Monthly plan
Awards:
- WINNER 2017 Pulitzer Prize in Poetry
- WINNER 2017 Anisfield-Wolf Book Award in Poetry
- WINNER 2017 Book Award from the Society of Midland Authors for Poetry
- 2016 National Book Critics Circle Award finalist for poetry
- 2017 PEN/Jean Stein Book Award finalist
- 2017 Kingsley Tufts Poetry Award finalist
- Named a Top Poetry Book of 2016 by Library Journal
Introduction:
- Olio centers on African-American artists and creators,
- an interest spawned from Jess’ curiosity about the origin of black music.
- Tyehimba Jess presents the
- …sweat and story behind America’s blues
- work songs and church hymns.
- Part fact, part fiction.
- He weaves sonnet, song, and narrative to examine
- …the lives of mostly unrecorded African American performers
- directly before and after the Civil War up to World War I.
Strong point:
- Tyehimba Jess has introduced me to a
- new type of poem: sonnet
- where 2 voices are counterpoints and syncopated.
- Two speakers are made to finsh each other’s sentences
- composing the same thought but
- …from a different position.
- Poem: General Bethune v. W.C. Handy
- The exploitive master/ manager of Blind Tom (austic pianist)
- and a great blues composer have a eery conversaton! (pg 22)
Conclusion:
- Jess has created a poetry book as a ‘world’
- and not a private place in his mind.
- He intertwines blues, history, letters, legend
- persona poems, prose poems, interviews
- song, culture …and illustrations.
- I learned about Blind Tom Wiggens (austic pianist)
- Edmonia Lewis (sculptor), Fisk Jubilee Singers
- Scott Joplin, John Boone….and many more.
- The book is an experience
- …that is the only way I can
- describe it!
- PS: Tyehimba Jess’s personal persona
- …is Julius Monroe Trotter in the book.
- He interviews some acquaintances of Scott Joplin.
- #JustSaying
- This is not a book where you tie a poem to a chair
- with a rope and attempt to beat out its meaning.
- You have to take your time….read a few poems a
- day then close the book.
- I tried to discover the starting subject and
- …then the discovered subject in a poem.
- There is always a door to be opened the
- will lead you down another path.
- I’ve reviewed one poem to show you what I mean.
- #MustRead….really, amazing!
Blind Tom Plays for Confederate Troops, 1863 (pg 15)
- Shape is the familiar left margin.
- Line breaks are punctuation.
- 1 stanza: a continuous musical flow in the poem.
- Starting subject:
- Tom is a blind piano player stomping his feet with the music
- …for the REB’s ..the Confederate soldier sing-a-long.
- Discovered subject:
- ..is introduced by a “door in the poem”….
- the word freedom (line 8/14 lines).
- The second half of the poem
- …gives us the stark message that:
- Tom still is somebody’s property
- …his Dixie sounds more like a work song.
- “…ringing with slaver’s song at master’s bidding.”
Last thoughts:
- This a short poetry review with the sole goal of
- ..describing a book of contemporary poetry.
- I’ve stopped with the compulsion to say everything
- …just want to give you
- …a few observations with the hope
- …that you will read more
- #Poetry !
#Poetry Winner Victorian Lit Award 2019

- Author: Kate Lilley
- Title: Tilt
- Published: 2018
- Genre: poetry (38 poems)
- Cover: 1948 photograph of Luna Park lighted windmill, Sydney
- Title: Tilt….express the feeling of being off-balance
- Trivia: 2019 Victorian Premier’s Award for poetry – winner
- List of Challenges 2019
- Monthly plan
- #AWW2019
- @AusWomenWriters
Introduction:
- Just finished reading 38 poems:
- TILT by Kate Lilley.
- Her talents…are mentally exhausting
- …and I mean that in a good way.
- Time for aperitif #Heineken.
- Poetry is hard work….more so than a novel!

What did I learn about just by reading these poems?
- Queen Christina – cult scenes in the movie with Greta Garbo (Poem: Femme Forte)
- Taboo subject unheard of in polite circles 19th C Edinburgh
- …The Drumsheugh Gardens School scandal 1810 (Poem: Children’s Hour)
- Slice of life of forgotten 1970s queer strip in Sydney (Poem: Tilt)
- Lillian Hellman’s 1934 production of Children’s Hour
- ….(see scandal Edinburgh) (Poem: Children’s Hour)
- La Maupin 17th C French swordswoman who caused
- havoc in a convent trying to escape with
- …her lesbian lover (OH!) (Poem: Children’s Hour)
- Kate Lilley’s 10 autobiographical poems (part 1) #heartwrenching
- I learned about Greta Garbo’s post showbiz life as recluse in NYC
- ..this was a poem-essay (Poem: Garbo at ‘Wits End’)
- Corporate talk “If you need me get in touch, backchannel me”
- (Poem: Coda)…sense of closure with first poem Tilt
- Poem for lovers in a transnational/digital world (Poem: Weather Channel)
- I learned why Lilley wrote an elegy for her father (author)
- …Merv Lilley (Poem: Her Bush Balland [Bourke St Elegy])
- …but not for her mother (poet) Dorothy Hewett (Poem: Memorandum)
- Lilley asks the question: (social issues)
- Why send a ship to sea unseaworthy? (refugees, mandatory detention)
- ..offering care to cargo
- …rather than care for people (Poem: In Harm’s Way)
Strong point: autobiographical poems
- Poetry tells us the history of the human heart.
- If you only read these 10 poems (pg 11-30)
- …than my mission is accomplished to encourage
- more readers to pick up a book of poems.
- I dove into TILT cold turkey.
- I thought:
- I speak English, the poem is in English
- and I still have no idea what it all means.
- Then I started to research Kate Lilley’s
- dysfunctional family.
- There are issues in the autobiographical poems
- …major issues!
- Kate Lilley was immersed (involuntarily)
- into the Bohemian lifestyle of her parents
- Merv Lilley and Dorothy Hewett in 1970s Sydney.
- Both Kate and her sister were being
- …abused by friends of their parents, predators.
- Lilley has suffered for years trying to put her life back together
- …after living with a mother who’s mottto was: ”Boys Will Be Boys”.
First lines of autobiographical poems: set the scene, setting
- This is a seductive device
- …dangling a setting in front of the reader.
- It does not make too many demands
- of there reader at the beginning.
- That will come later.
- The first couple of stanzas takes the reader
- …by the hand and guides him into the poem.
First lines…
- Fonzies Fantasyland at 31 Oxford St nows a disappointing IGA [SETS SCENE, A SETTING]
- One morning walking down Bourke St I hear my father’s voice [SETS SCENE, A SETTING]
- Mystic Rainbow cuisenaire rods (math learning aid)
- The first man who put his hands on me ( Oh, we are curious)
- Sounds quaint but in those days… [SETS SCENE, A SETTING]
- Winter White crepe maxi (…don’t know where this is going)
- At the Australian Society of Authors Xmas Party ( …we are curious)
- Conversation meant listening to adults (…been there, done that!)
- We were all there (…who is WE? …where is THERE?)
- He appears in the doorway [SETS SCENE, A SETTING]
- The girl I sat next to in maths at high-school (…we are curious, what about her?)
- Pushed up against the metal rim of the shower (…feels aggressive, [SETS SCENE, A SETTING]
- Overhead on the street [SETS SCENE, A SETTING]
- For her to die like that nobody there (…who? ) [SETS SCENE, A SETTING]
Conclusion:
- 38 poems
- 3 parts:
- Tilt (autobiographical and confessional poems)
- In Harm’s Way (based on events and experience in psychiatry)
- Realia (facts) – (poems related to Greta Garbo, and many ‘list poems’)
- I liked 65% of these poems
- ….pretty good return on investment.
- Unique: Kate Lilley writes list poems (…completely new for me!)
- By listing words Lilley wants to create a sense of what this book
- is about: dysfunctional family – therapy, hospital – Greta Garbo
- by just listing carefully selected words.
- List poems are puzzles!
Last thoughts:
- A poem is like a diary
- ….without the lock and key.
- Poetry is not difficult.
- I’ve read 5 different collections in the past weeks
- …and EVERY book was enthralling!
- I never get this buzz after reading a novel…never!
Collections read:
- USA – Jericho Brown – Anisfield-Wolf Award 2015
- IRELAND – Gerard Fanning – Winner Rooney Prize Poetry 1993
- NEW ZEALAND – Therese Lloyd – Shorlist Ockham Prize 2019 (prize 14 May 2019)
- AUSTRALIA – Kate Lilley – Winner Victorian Premier’s Award 2019
- NEW ZEALAND – Cilla McQueen – Shorlist Ockham Prize 2011
#AWW2019 Winner NSW Lit Award for Drama

- Author: Kendall Feaver
- Title: The Almighty Sometimes
- Published: 2018
- Genre: play
- List of Challenges 2019
- Monthly plan
- #AWW2019
- @AusWomenWriters
- @Brow_Books
- @kendallfeaver
- #NSWPLA
Awards:
- Triivia: 2019 Prize for Drama: NSW Literary Awards
- Trivia: 2019 Prize for Drama: Victorian Premier’s Award
- Trivia: 2018 Judges’ Award Bruntwood Prize for Playwriting
- Trivia: 2018 Best New Play at the UK Theatre Awards
Quickscan:
- The play centers on a young woman (Anna).
- She has been medicated for a range of mood and
- behavioral disorders since she was a child.
- Now she wants to find out what
- ...her life would be like without pills.
- The play takes an unflinching look at
- mental illness and medication among young people.
What is the structure of the play?
- Act 1 (7 scenes) – reading time: 1 hr 30 min
- Act 2 (6 scenes) – reading time: 50 min
Cover:
- There are two book covers
- ….that convey different messages.
- Daughter: breaking free…carefree and in control of her life
- …after she chooses to stop her mental illness medication.
- Mother: having spent years keeping her daughter safe
- …is powerless to stop her.
Daughter: Anna

Mother: Renée

What is the trigger in Act 1 ….something big at stake?
- Anna suffers from mental
- ….heath issues (bipolar) since she was a child.
- In Act 1 she is 18 yr and decides
- …she wants to stop with her medication.
- This is a very scary decision she makes.
- It affects everyone else around her.
- Her mother really struggles NOT to intervene.
What is the tension in the play?
- Anna has one desire…to stop medicating
- …and be in control of her life.
- The journey pursuing this desire forms the plot.
- The tension for the audience is
- the DOUBT that is aroused about Anna…
- “..will she or won’t she break free of the pills?”
- Strong point:
- Ms Feaver generates a subtext (stories of 8 yr girl)
- ….that she can play off of in the play
- The history of what has happened
- …moments that refer to the character’s past.
- are very important part of the play.
- Strong point:
- The play is deliberately intimidating
- …about a girl in a sudden state of crisis
- …to raise awareness
- …about youth’s mental health issues.
- Ms Kendall has done extensive research
- and spoken to many psychiatrists.
- It took Kendall Feaver 5 years to finish the script.
- Strong Point:
- Title: The Almighty Sometimes
- …has intrigued me from the beginning!
- It refers to an option on questionnaires:
- Never – Always – Sometimes.
- Sometimes....Anna is troubled
- …but sometimes she is
- …good, kind and capable.
- It is a hard choice a mother
- …must make when answering
- …questions about her daughter.
Conclusion:
- 2-Act structure is a simple.
- It looks at the character’s journey
- …in he clinical world living day to day
- with a mental health condition.
- There is a routine of life between
- mother and daughter that passes for existence.
- Frenetic activity is expressed in the
- …dialogue with boyfriend Oliver
- …and psychiatrist Vivienne.
- Later this gives way to many
- moments of silence between daughter and mother.
- Anna is pushed to the extreme
- …as her internal and external worlds explode.
- Act 1 may feel a bit too long…but keep reading.
- Act 2 is where the fireworks display starts!
Last thoughts:
- Mother-daughter relationships are complex.
- Some mothers and daughters are best friends.
- Some avoid conflict.
- Others talk through everything…
- …not so between Anna and Renée!
- Strong point:
- The best part of the play…
- …as Kendall Feaver shows us a
- snapshot of real life with a protective mother
- …and a daughter who feels she’s been lied
- …to, misunderstood and mis-diagnosed!
- The Almighty Sometimes is best seen on stage
- where sparks will fly between mother and daughter.
- Reading the play is the only alternative I have
- ….but am probably missing the best part:
- …the actors performance!

#Poetry Cilla McQueen

- Author: Cilla McQueen
- Title: The Radio Room (34 poems)
- Published: 2011
- Genre: poetry
- List of Challenges 2019
- Monthly plan
- #AWW2019
- @AusWomenWriters
- Trivia: Ockham NZ Awards shortlisted Poetry Prize 2011
- Trivia: If you ever read this collection of poems
- …I will save you some time.
- It took me 2 days to find the meaning of Maori words
- mentioned in three poems: About the Fog, Reprise and
- Talking to My Tokotoko.
- “Hopupu Honengenenge Matangi Rau”
- …which in Maori means
- “the long water which bubbles, swirls and is uneven”.
- #YourWelcome
Who is Cilla McQueen?
- Mcqueen was Born in Birmingham, England
- …and moved to New Zealand when she was four years old.
- She ranks amongst the finest poets of her generation.
- Trivia: Three New Zealand Book Awards
- Trivia: 2009 Prime Minister’s Award for Literary Achievement
- Trivia: New Zealand’s Poet Laureateship (2009-2011)
- In The Radio Room, Poet Laureate Cilla McQueen
- …travels space and time, throwing thoughts (Poem: Bookworm)
- from Bluff NZ , her corner of the world, to the ancient Celtic islands
- of her ancestors. (St Klida, Island Mull) (Poem series: Elements 1,2,3,4)
Conclusion: My notes about a few poems….
Poem: The Ghostly Beast
- Reference: 15th C Scottish history
- Macdonalds of Clanranald…carry off booty van rival clan
- …rough estimante 600 cows.
- McQueen describes fear of people “in the bothy” (cottage)
- Sounds of “song of a storm, roiling tempest”
- “…a lowing so close”
- Is it a our cow or the ghosts of stolen cattle?
- Conclusion: No emotional impact but I do
- learn that McQueen bases many poems
- on her Scottish heritage.
- #BadChoice for kick-off poem in collecton :(
Poem: About the Fog
- Reference: feelings about loss (mother)
- McQueen’s personal journal…
- …pages destroyed b/c book left on a table
- ….during a foggy night.
- …”vanished thoughts”
- washed away “…as if by tears.”
- Blue ink turned “…turquoise wash
- …word-slivers….beld edges”
- Conclusion: very moving poem
- #TimeForKleenex
Reading tip:
- I read this poem 1 x … it made no sense.
- I’m too close to the text, to eager to understand
- …hence see nothing!
- Then I wrote each stanza in longhand,
- absorbing each sentence as I went on.
- That is the best way to ‘read’ poems.
- You just have to invest some time and
- effort to distill the poet’s message.
- Sometimes objects art not things.
- Objects are news…that is part of the puzzle.
Poems: Altar (Elements 1)
- Reference: Island of Mull– 15th C MacKinnon’s Cave
- Deep inside lies a large, flat slab of rock, known as Fingal’s Table
- used as an altar by hermits and early followers of the Christian church.
- The first part of the poem
- …refers to the ‘sin’ of killing
- the Great Auk bird on St. Kilda, Scotland 1844.
- The second part refers to a Greek mythical figure of
- a warrior Amazon.
- She offers the spirits a gift as does…the narrator.
- The poem is bookended:
- Part 1: laid our sin on the altar
- Part 2: laid our prayer on the altar
- Conclusion: this poem needed some
- research to understand it (Great Auk).
- No emotional impact…just historical interest
- #Dud
Poem Beacon (Elements 2)
- Reference: Island of Mull– 15th C MacKinnon’s Cave
- This was very different compared to Altar (Elements 1)
- I thought there would be a connection
- ….but the contrast was the best part!
- McQueen uses beautiful lyrical language to
- give us an image of a beacon of light
- leaping from “altar to altar, island to island”.
- Conclusion: Images linger; fascinated
- McQueen makes a (lighthouse) beam come to life …
- “a quartz shiver”….with ” quicksilver feet’!
- #Magical
Poem: Bookworm
- Reference: Martin Martin from the Island of Skye.
- 1690s he decided to visit St. Kilda and
- record the natural history and culture.
- This was a frustrating read.
- I must have read it 10 x…!
- It feels as if McQueen read the historical
- document by M. Martin and just left her
- thoughts drift: “tell past to know time present”.
- She compares herself with a (title) bookworm
- that tunnels through books
- …as she does through memory.
- Literary device:
- antimetabole (reversal of words)
- “…on dark ground white words, on white ground dark words.”
- This device can be pithy and powerful
- …but it fell flat in this poem.
- Conclusion: exasperated…only wish Ms McQueen
- could explain this poem to me.
- PS:...to make matters worse
- …my reading glasses broke today
- so I was forced to read this through “old lenses”!
Poem: Foveaux Express
- Reference: ferry between Bluff and Stewart Island
- McQueen compares poetry to the catamaran ferry ride.
- Ferry: it is ‘swift as the stroke of a pen…text in motion’
- Poem: “…gimballed (supported) on muscling swells (waves)
- …word-ware cargo.”
- Conclusion: McQueen tells me why I should read poems:
- “Poetry takes you apart, puts you back different”
Poem: Lens
- Literary devices: filled with …alliteration and assonant rhyme
- webbed wash-house windows
- dusty dwang (building), bee-sting blue-bag
Poem: Ripples
- This poem is considered one of the best poems of New Zealand
- The Poets mentioned in “Ripples” are Joanna Paul (1945-2003)
- and Hone Tuwhare (1922-2008).
- #Impressive
Poem: Soapy Water
- McQueen is so clever!
- #Hysterical!
Poem: Three Elaborations
- After reading several poems like this one
- ….topic is about a beloved one who passed away.
- …gone with Ganyede, beloved one,
- to fill the crystal glasses of the gods.
- …you swore to send a message back from death…
- …empty VB bottles queueing by the sink
- …all gone – the house as quiet as Miss McKenzie’s old piano…
- I can assume Hone Tuwhare was
- Cilla McQueens life partner after her divorce in 1986.
- I can find no biographical information to support my
- assumption…just a ‘woman’s intuition’ that Hone was the
- #LoveOfHerLife.
Poem: Coastling (Elements 3)
- I took a page out of Mcqueen’s book and
- …let MY thoughts drift after reading this poem:
Poem:
- I meet myself coming the other way.
- Distinguish between two grains of sand.
- No power on earth can change me,
- nothing pins me down.
- Within my high and low I belong to none.
- A sacred slate where law is written.
- Conclusion: Title: Coastline
- I imagine a beach and
- …the poet gazing at her footprints (“…met myself”).
- Nothing “pins me down”.
- Footprints are washed away
- …by the next wave (“belong to none”).
- The next step she makes is
- …on “a sacred slate where law is written.”
Poem: Mining Lament
- This is playful poetic pantoum!
- A verse form composed of stanzas in which the
- second and fourth lines
- ….are repeated as the
- …first and third lines of the following stanza.
- 10 lines and McQueen stretches the poem to 20 lines
- ….a pantoum!
- She repeats lines so subtly
- …that if you read it without a warning
- you would think it contains 20 separate lines of poetry!
- #BrainTeaser
- NOTE: the last line of a pantoum is the same as the first,
- making this a form of ouroboros type.
- The ouroboros a SYMBOL in the form of a snake
- …consuming its own tail.
- The poem ends where it begins
- ….a never-ending circle.
- How cool is that?
- #WhoSaidPoetryIsBoring
What is my favorite poem in the collection?
- It has to be a poem of friendship for 2nd Poet Laureate of
- New Zealand Hone Tuwhare. (1922-2008).
Poem: Letter to Hone 1
- I so impressed by the tenderness and
- affectionate words McQueen uses to celebrate this poet.
- I can only assume this is a tribute to him just after his death.
- He passed away in 2008 and
- …this collection was published 2010.
- I don’t usually post the poems I read…but this one
- I must share:
- Note: Matua Tokotoko = Maori carved walking stick
- …that is a symbol of great respect.
Letter to Hone 1
- Dear Hone, by your Matua Tokotoko
- sacred in my awkward arms,
- its cool black mockings
- my shallow grasp
- I was
- utterly blown away.
- I am sitting beside you at Kaka Point
- in an armchair with chrome arm-rests
- very close to the stove.
- You smile at me,
- look back at the flames,
- add a couple of logs,
- take my hand in your bronze one,
- doze awhile;
- Open your bright dark eyes,
- give precise instructions as to the location of
- the whisky bottle
- on the kitchen shelf, and of two glasses.
- I bring them like a lamb.
- You pour a might dram.
Last Poem: Your Eyes
- Of course…no mistake
- Hoen T. was McQueen’s soul mate.
- Trivia: Yvonne mentioned in the last line
- is the NZ writer Yvonne du Fresne (1929-2011)
Last thoughts:
- Unlike poems by
- Jericho Brown (USA, raw, gritty)
- Gerard Fanning (IRELAND, nostalgic, playful)
- Therese Lloyd (NZ, heartbreak, visiting Ed Hopper’s paintings)
- Cilla McQueen’s poems were exhausting!
- I mean this in a good way…she makes me think.
- Her best poems are about her grief losing Hone Tuwhare.
- Also best poems include the ones in which
- …McQueen shows us what is like at…
- the end of the world in New Zealand her hometown
- Bluff in Southland is the country’s most southerly tip,
- Subjects: weather, animals, whaling, oystering, shipwrecks, the sea.
- She has a sharp eye for particularly New Zealand detail.
- “my Tolotoko” (Poem: About the Fog)
- A tokotoko is a traditional Māori carved ceremonial walking stick.
- ..a symbol of authority and status for the speaker holding it.
- “bronze totara” (Poem: Crazy Horse) – tree in New Zealand
- “In a kowhai two bellbird sing…” (Poem: In Hand) –
- small tree and bird prevalent to New Zealand (greenish colors)
- McQueen’s most difficult poems are based on
- …Scottish myth, legend and history.
- It requires more research to understand
- …just a few snapshots in the poems.
#Poetry Month Gerard Fanning (Irish)

- Author: Gerard Fanning (1952-2017)
- Title: Water & Power
- Published: 2004
- Genre: poetry
- Table of contents: 30 poems
- List of Challenges 2019
- Monthly plan
- #PoetryMonth
Introduction:
- Who was Gerard Fanning?
- You probably NEVER heard of him!
- Neither had I…
- While researching Black Rock Baths in
- The IrishTimes I read an article:
- “Poet and Rooney Prize winner Gerard Fanning dies”.
- Who was this man?
- As soon as I opened the article
- …Fanning’s gaze stared past me
- without recognition.
- I looked again.
- There was a puzzling
- …melancholy in his eyes.
- Where was the Irish lilt?
- I knew I had to read his poems.

Cover:
- The title Water & Power is from
- …one of Fanning’s favorite films
- Chinatown.
- The cover of the book is …
- muted fungus-green water
- with a tugboat and a few ships
- on the far horizon.
- How bland can you make a book?
- I found the link b/t cover and poem Water & Power.
- Fanning dives into the Merrimack River (USA)
- ..makes a splash (cover)...with an unexpected result!
- Niall Naessens (Irish artist)
- has made better paintings than this! (see fotos at end of review)
- The popular idiom is
- “Don’t judge a book by its cover,”
- …warns us to be objective….
- the vast majority of readers use the cover of a book
- …as a deciding factor in the decision to buy/read the book!
- Despite the cover design
- I dove into the murky water.
.
Poem: Offering The Light
- The first poem was frustrating
- …so not a good start.
- The only clue I had was the word scoreboard.
- After 2 attempts I finally discovered the poem is about cricket!
- to offer the light = take batsmen off the pitch b/c of fading daylight
- night watchman = rookie batsman sent out to finish the game by fading light
- silly point = field position
- bye = extra scored runs
- If you don’t know these words the poem makes no sense!
Poem: A Carol For Clare
- This is a haunting poem for a woman named Clare.
- Fanning dedicated the book to her
- …but who is Clare?
- There is not much information about Gerard Fanning available.
- 47 words, 5 stanzas, rhyme (ab-ab-ab-ab-ab)
- The poem gives the reader clues…suburbs of Dublin
- Philboro, Portobello, Railto, Pimlico and Marino.
- It feels like Fanning is describing a life moving from
- one place to another with his beloved Clare.
- “Lie with your ghost in Marino…
- Shepherd the fading decibel.”
Poem: The Railway Guard
- This is a description of a walk
- from Drogheda…past the church to Marsh Road.
- Two young lovers….pause to kiss in the
- (lyrical descriptions of flowers) white eel grass,
- sea holly and sea lavender.
- But the young girl turns whiter than all
- the flowers when she meets the narrator’s
- grandfather…the railway guard.
- What is so fascinating about the poem?
- This line:
- “…but Clare smiles and whispers….”
- There she is again …Fanning’s mystery woman!
- Now we know
- …Clare must be Gerard Fanning’s mother.
Poems: that brush at mortality:
The Cancer Bureau
- Images of the patient’s puffed belly being painted with a
- “Load Line or the Plimsol mark.”
- (level reached when a ship is properly load
- “She (nurse) says it will rise and fall in salt water.”
Wide of the Mark
- Image of a nurse coaxing a mirror down throat
- “Pointing like an idot savant
- To the very heart of things.”
The Wards
- Images of patient in intensive care
- “…after the final blizzard…(stroke)
- head lying amongst the strings of the tent.” (oxygen tent)
Playful poems:
- Fanning brings balance in the collection with
- …some very amusing poems!
- The Watcher’s House – a swallow guards his nest…his Alhambra!
- Moving a Garden Shed – describes this Herculean feat!
- Looking up – I’m learniing to read poems…”world of fleece’ = clouds!
Best quotes:
- These are found in the
- impressive last poem Canower Sound (pg 49-55)
- 40 couplets…snapshots of Ireland’s west coastline
- mixed with the poet’s thoughts that criss-cross
- with memories of Venice, Florence,
- Tall men like De Valera and De Gaulle,
- Western actor Jack Elam and Swedish director Bergman
- A poem that reflects changing times and places.
Quote:
- “Waves danced arm in arm
- like a couple of swells,”
- (stylish grand men of high social status)
Quote:
- Our tide comes and goes
- murmuring in the shag and slime of stones.”
Concluson:
- The poems are meditative, playful
- and some are haunting riddles.
- My only regret is I cannot find any biographical
- …material about the poet that might enrich my readings.
- There are many references to Canada:
- Vancouver, Pr. Edward Island, Cape Spear New Foundland
- Okanagan, British Columbia.
- Fanning must have had a
- …close connection to the country
- …but I’m clueless what the link was.
- Poem: Ludwig, Ruth and I is an other example.
- It took a lot of investigating but I learned that
- ..Fanning refers to
- Ludwig Wittgenstein.
- I still don’t know who Ruth is!
- #PoemsArePuzzles
- Strong point: Fanning is a wordsmith!
- He dazzled me with his rich vocabulary
- Strong point: Fanning does not go “mythical”
- …as many poets do to impress.
- It was a pleasent change with no references
- to the gods on Mount Olympus “N”em ( …see post Jericho Brown!)
Playlist:
- Here is the audible essence of Gerard Fanning’s poems.
- He mentioned this classic
- piece of music in the last poem
- Canower Sound
Last thoughts:
- Don’t be fooled by Fanning’s
- …melancholy “baby-blues”.
- His poems are so rewarding for readers who are
- willing to do some work.
- Some of the poems were hard to read because
- I had to look up so many of the words,
- so there was quite a bit of learning involved!
- That is coming from someone that reads all the time
- …but I do like a good challenge!
- New rule: I put the poetry book under
- my pillow + magnifying glass. (..I can never find my glasses in the dark!)
- Now I can re-read a few poems in the morning…
- while the cat is purring …my brain is still fresh.
- Poems have to settle in my mind.
Paintings by Niall Naessens
- Look at the color!
- Why not use these colors for Water & Power?
Brandon Bay, Ireland

Good Morning, Mr Turner

#Poetry Month April Jericho Brown

- Author: Jericho Brown
- Title: The New Testament
- Published: 2014
- Genre: poetry
- Table of contents: 41 poems
- Trivia: 2015 Anisfield-Wolf Book Award.
- Trivia: Brown holds a
- Ph.D. University of Houston
M.F.A. University of New Orleans
B.A. Dillard University. - He is an associate professor and
- the director of the Creative Writing Program
- …at Emory University.
- List of Challenges 2019
- Monthly plan
- #PoetryMonth
Narrator:
- Extended version of Jericho Brown…
- …an American gay black man attacked by society and dying of disease.
- The author became very ill with HIV in 2010.
Conclusion:
- Moving on to a new poet after spending
- days with The Facts by Therese Lloyd
- …in New Zealand is not easy.
- But ‘reading life’ goes on.
- Jericho Brown…some say he is the new James Baldwin.
- His commentary on race is deeply vivid. (see poem: The Interrogation)
- His poetry explores trauma, race, class, sexuality, spirituality.
- I’m reading Jericho Brown
- because he supplies the shock and awe
- that only poetry can express.
- I was NEVER taught poetry in school.
- Everything was about Shakespeare’s plays or
- classic like N. Hawthorne’s The Scarlet Letter or
- R.L. Stevenson’s The Deerslayer.
- Now that I have finally immersed myself in this genre.
- I loved Brown’s explanation how he got to love poetry:
- ” My mother would drop me off at the library because
- …she could not afford childcare…the best thing that happened to me!”
Last thoughts
- The downside:
- …I can only read 5-6 poems a day.
- It is just too much to absorb.
- I tried to read a poem without any foreknowledge
- …but realized some allusions went way over my head.
- So I have to study the poem…before I read it.
- It attests to the depth and intensity of the poems.
- The upside:
- … I enjoy the isolation of reading a small
- piece of prose
- …not in the mood for novels at the moment.
- There is so much to discover in
- just 20-60 lines and ….a few stanzas.
- I am amazed by Brown’s command of language
- …and his ability to combine his personal grief
- …with social injustice.
My notes on a few poems:
- According to Brown…
- “Poetry wakes us up!”
- Poetry It is not difficult.
- It asks something of us
- …that reality TV does not ask of us.”
Colosseum
- I completely missed the importance to the
- word gladiator in this poem.
- A man who stands bravely
- and fights the inevitable slaughter.
- Best quote:
- “I know how my own (slaughter) feels
- …that I live with it, and sometimes uses it
- …to get the living done.”
- Jericho Brown stands bravely in his poems
- …knowing all too well what is at stake.
Romans 12:1
- Bible text:
- “…to offer your bodies as a living sacrifice
- … your true and proper worship”
- I thought I understood the poem
- Reading the bible text gives me the
- insight that Brown is alluding to
- …offering his body to another man.
- But in the lines we discover the American
- society’s aversion to feminity in the male.
- “…my people {…} will not call me brother”
- In a podcast I heard
- Jericho Brown reveal the difficulty of separating
- a poet’s autobiography from his work.
- Writing confessional poetry is difficult when
- a person is so private…as Brown is.
- But who does it hurt more me or you to
- write these poems?
- Jericho Brown rarely speaks to his
- evangelical fundamentalist Christian parents.
- After his coming out as a gay man…his parents
- did not embrace him.
- Jericho Brown lets you hear what it is
- …like to live in his world.
Heartland
- The local doctor has a biblical echo
- “…the boy can only hope for miracles.”
- In “Heartland,” one of the book’s opening poems, Brown writes,
- “I do anything other than the human thing,”
- Central idea of the book:
- The narrator is one who doesn’t completely fit in
- …is made to feel less than human.
Labor
- Description of narrator’s Saturday odd-job cutting lawns for old ladies
- Nice sentence: “….they (mothers and big sisters)
- …want to please and pray for the chance to say please to.”
- — five-dollar bill rolled tighter than a joint! (funny)
- — tell the difference between mowed lawns and vacuumed carpets
- — “The loneliest people have earth to love…and not one friend their own age.”
The Interrogation – divided into seven parts.
II. Cross-Examination” and IV. Redirect
- Brown narrates an imagined conversation
- between himself and an interrogator.
- The narrator defends his heritage:
- (Best quote)
- “What you call a color I call
- …A way.”
- The interrogator responds:
- “Forgive us. We don’t mean to laugh
- It’s just that black is,
- After all, the absence of color.”
.
VI. Multiple Choice
- Haunting:
- “Show me A man who tells his children
- The police will protect them
- And I’ll show you the son of a man
- Who taught his children where
- To dig.”
- The exchanges between these two voices are haunting and memorable.
- The poem reminds the reader of Ferguson…
- The Ferguson Unrest (Aug 2014) protests and riots that began the day
- …after the fatal shooting of Michael Brown by police.
- The unrest sparked a vigorous debate about
- …relationship police officers and African Americans.
Paradise
- The narrator talks to his abusive father.
- The last sentence knocked the wind out of my sails.
To Be Seen
- Narrator: (Jericho Brown was diagnosed 2010 with HIV)
- recalls his doctor speaking in metaphors of war…
- ”Its always the virus that attacks the cells..”
- “Hell, I remember his saying the word SIEGE when a rash returned.”
’N’em
- Jericho Brown moved back to the south
- …after living many years in California.
- He had forgotten some missing terms he once knew.
- One of these terms is ’N’em.
- Meaning:
- that person and everyone who might associate with that person.
- Use in a sentence:
- “Hey, how you been…how’s your mama and ’N’em.
- This poem is absolutely stunning in its simplicity.
- It packs an emotional punch without cliché
- …especially in the last 2 line.
Langston’s Blues
- Persona poem in which Brown uses the voice of Langston Hughes.
- It alludes to the poem Hughes
- wrote when he was 18yr The Negro Speaks of Rivers.
#Ockham NZ Awards poetry Therese Lloyd

- Author: Therese Lloyd
- Title: The Facts
- Published: 2018
- Genre: poetry
- Trivia: 2019 Ockham NZ Book Awards shortlist
- List of Challenges 2019
- Monthly plan
- @theockhams
- @VUPBooks
- #AWW2019
- @AusWomenWriters
Poem: “no title”
- Just 64 words, no title, no punctuation, no capital letters.
- But this poem had the
- …emotional impact of fear and hope.
- Fear moves one away from something a feeling
- “common and strangely comfortable.”
- Hope moves one towards something a feeling
- that starts with “a voiceless wish”.
- The heightened image of a ‘pinned down moth”
- who wants to fly home is beautiful.
- A moth where the ‘hot glass ceiling” (of specimen drawer)
- “reflected only her calm, resolute gaze.”
- How often do we feel ‘pinned down’?
- Conclusion: excellent poem to kick-off this collection
- …it will linger in your mind.
Prose poem: On Looking at Photographs in High School Yearbooks
Appears as prose (anecdotes about school chums and her mother)
Reads like poetry (…not really, no pattern, rhythm, rhyme)
No line breaks (…just paragraphs)
What can I find ‘poetic about it?
No much, no elaborate metaphors
but I did find one symbol: eclipse and
repetition of the word ‘lack’ to help me pinpoint
the core message of the prose poem.
Conclusion:
Narrator: “…hated myself” for the “..lack of shimmer, the confusion”
The yearbooks “brought a swift eclipse of 28 years.” (Re: symbol)
“There is always more lack waiting” and
it fell like a shadow (Re: phase of eclipse) over her life.
Now the yearbooks have shone light on her memories (Re: phase of eclipse)
and she discovers the faces of those girls (Re: in yearbooks)
“All naked and plain. We all had it.”
Poem: Y2k
- Y2K (2 long stanzas) felt like to distinct poems.
- stanza 1: What is humanness….what does it feel like?
- stanza 2: NZ feels high-esteem “… That lovely conceit of time”
- …because in 2000 Gisbourne NZ felt the first rays of sunshine
- …in the new millennium.
- Conclusion: average poem with no emotional impact for me.
Poem: On Metaphysical Insight (metaphysical = ‘after the physical’)
- It took me an hour to read 10 lines!
- That attests to the Therese Lloyd’s talent.
- She walks creatively into a painting by Ed Hopper
- ….but the reader must discover
- …which painting it is from the clues in the poem.
- Lloyd opens the poem:
- “Night-time alone suffocates colour.”
- Now the reader must see the
- …thick black oils, smeared yellow lights
- and a frowning bowl of fruit
- …to help one to unlock this poem.
- Conclusion: Chef d’oeuvre, master work!
- I saw things in Ed Hopper’s painting after reading
- …this poem that I never saw before.
Most difficult section to comprehend:
Pg 34-43
- Lloyd wants to illustrate that poems echo
- and reecho against each other.
- ‘They cannot live alone anymore than we can”.
- Five poems and than five second drafts of these poems
- …were difficult appreciate.
- I just do not have the poetic savvy
- to see connections or disjunction between the poems.
- Sigh.
Update: I found the connections! Now you try!
Best selection…..absolutely amazing.
- The Facts (pg 44-52)
- Listen to a broken heart….
- …it is sounds more like a confession.
Poem: Funeral Playlist (pg 68)
- Never read a poem with a playlist before!
- With Spotify I listened to Lloyd’s selections.
- I tried to find the line(s) in the lyrics that would
- reveal the emotions Lloyd has hidden in this poem
- #Inventive
- Playlist:
- Into My Arms (Nick Cave and The Bad Seeds)
- Here’s Where the Story Ends (The Sundays)
- Avalon (Brian Ferry, Roxy Music)
Conclusion:
- I reviewed a few of the poems in this book.
- There are 32 poems divided into groups:
- Time — Desire — Absence.
- Lloyd writes 3 poems with reference to
- 3 paintings by Ed Hopper: Office at Night
- Western Hotel and Eleven a.m.
- If you place the image of the painting from Google images
- in front of you and then read these poems
- …it is an unique poetic experience!
- The Facts is MY CHOICE to win
- Ockham NZ Book Award 2019 for poetry.
- It is the ONLY collection I could get my hands on
- before 14 May 2019.
- Will one of the other nominees win?
- …only the jury can tell us
- …and I will see if I agree after 15th of July
- …when my books arrive!
Last thoughts:
- I think of reading poetry in terms of Zen:
- Trying new things reminds us
- …that it’s ok to take small steps,
- to make a little progress each day.
- It’s ok to feel inept at something at first.
- The goal is learning, not perfecting.

